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Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8 (Rehosted)

Postby Jodo » Mon May 29, 2017 1:00 pm

Click Here for Era of Darkness Volume 1: Chapters 1-10 and Volume 2: Chapters 1-7

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"We must be close," says Kane. "He should be up here."

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"We're close, right?" asks Dreya as she checks the corner.

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"Yeah," says Jai slowly, looking around. "It should be just up here."

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Kane lets out a controlled breath as he scans the small space. "I'll go on up ahead."

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"Let me run up here," says Jai to the group of Alliance contacts. "Just cover my back."

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"Nice to see you again," says Jai, holstering his pistol.
Kane smirks under his helmet. "Likewise."

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"So what's this about?" asks Kane. "Any news on the Rebels? Dreya? The Cerean?"
Jai Wroth feels a chill go up his legs as he thinks about what to say next. "Well," he pauses. "Not exactly."

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Kane grasps his pistol as his eyes move side to side, watching for any hint of what might occur.

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"It's," Jai begins. "This is going to be sudden, okay?" he pauses.

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"What did you do?" growls Kane loudly.

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"Just remember to stay calm, please."

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"Drop your weapon!" a voice echos throughout the space suddenly.

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"Stay there, stay there!" shouts another Rebel. "Don't move!"

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"Hey, woa! Woa!" Shouts Kalin as he comes around the corner, quickly spotting the Rebels with their rifles raised.

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"Stop there! Hold it!"

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"Don't count on it!" shouts Haas as he enters the corridor, scanning for potential targets.
"Wait!" says Meade. "Hold your fire, no one fire!"

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"I can get two of them," says Kalin without blinking. "Just say so!"

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"Wait, wait!" says Jai walking between the two groups. "Hold up! Just stop! Hear me out here!"

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"Wroth!" Get to cover!" Commands Dreya, her heart beating a bit harder, seeing the man step between the two groups. "Please," she says, focusing on Kane.

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"Wait," whispers Jai with a slight smile. "Just wait."

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He slowly turns to make eye contact with Kane, his nerves touchy. "Look, Kane," he says, trying to appeal to him. "You have to understand. I've got good intentions here. You-you," he stammers. "We just need to talk about something, about your friend, Brior."

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"I know, I'm not supposed to know about that," says Jai to Dreya. "But I do. And they deserve to know."

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"It's our fault," he says. "No one has heard from him because the Alliance got him caught. He needs your help Kane. He needs your men. He needs us to help him." Jai raises his hands, not sure what will happen. "The Empire detained him in an Imperial prison-"

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"Hey!" yells the Alliance rifleman. "Don't say anything else-"
"Quiet!" commands Dreya, watching the situation, her eyes wide.

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"Why would Captain Brior be in an Imperial Prison?" asks Kane, gritting his teeth. "Tell me that."

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"It's complicated," says Jai. "Everything's complicated, okay? I'll explain-we'll explain everything we know, let's just lower our weapons first, alright?"

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"We're not gonna do that right now," says Kane. "That one-eyed Cerean tried to convince us Brior was a Rebel sympathizer. You know where Rebels belong? Hell."

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"Don't escalate it Kane," says Meade. "Kalin, Haas, come on! Think here!"

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"Kane," says Jai. "Brior was looking out for you. Get me? The Empire detained him because he was looking out for you. He wanted peace. That's all!"

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"The Aberrant Dawn is behind us, we want to be clear of that mess. I don't know what you're trying to do here-"

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"You never will be," says Jai. "You know that they won't stop hunting you. Brior has been detained. I'm not lying to you. You needed to know. You needed to meet these people and hear it for yourself."

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"Brior is a good man."

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"I'm sure."

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"He is," adds Dreya. "And a good friend."

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"Brior is no friend to you," says Kalin bluntly.

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"You'd be surprised," she responds.

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"Look," says Jai. "This is the situation. The Empire wants us all dead or locked up. And one way or another, they're gonna get that. Right?"

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"I'm finally understanding," he says. "There's always gonna be this big divide that separates the galaxy. And it doesn't matter what I do, I'm caught in the middle. But maybe sometimes we just need to step back and look at things from a distance."

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"There's people we like, and people we don't like. Sometimes we just have to figure things out for ourselves and work past our differences. Sometimes living is more important. Sometimes we're just gonna have to cast our differences aside and stand up for what we think is right. Sometimes we're gonna have to ignore the past so we can press on."

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"I know things are tough, and you have to keep playing sides. And you can all hate me, and you can want to kill me for this, all of you. But you needed to know about Brior, and they needed to tell you. And this might have been the only way we could have met."

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"Because this galaxy is broken. And it's gonna take a lot of different people to fix it! We can agree on that, right? And you can fight for different things: justice, independence, clearing your names and righting your wrongs, but that's also gonna take cooperation. It's gonna be working together and it's gonna be hard, but we have to figure something out. We have to help Brior."

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"Okay?"

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"Contact right!!!!" yells the rebel.

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"Kane," shouts Jai. "Watch it!"
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"We have to go!" shouts Dreya over the blaster fire.

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"Copy that!" growls Kane. "We're getting out of here!"

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"Watch the flank!" yells Kalin, as Imperial soldiers begin to block the group in.

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"Kane, fall back through that corridor! We'll cover you!"

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Kane growls audibly.

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"We're cut off!" says Kalin. "We can't go that way!"

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"Go out the back," bellows Kane.

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"You sure about this, sir?" asks Kalin sarcastically as he fires his pistol.

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"No," says Kane.

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"And you! We're gonna talk if we survive this."

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"Fall back, fall back" shouts the rebels as they flee the corridor, while several blaster bolts fly past Dreya, each barely missing her.

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"We're moving, let's go, let's go!"

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"Dreya!" shouts Jai, as she stumbles to get behind cover.

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"Come on, let's go, let's go!"

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Quickly, the group exits the alcove-

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-As Kane fires off one last shot.

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The smell off burnt air whirls through the tight space.

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"They're on the run!"

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"Cease fire, cease fire," commands the sergeant. "Maintain positions."

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"Sir, shouldn't we pursue?"

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"Negative-"

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"Too many loses for a patrol-"

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"We'll call it in."
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby CloneCrazy » Mon May 29, 2017 5:59 pm

That was amazing!!! I'll give proper feedback soon, but I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed reading this chapter. It is easily one of my favorite photonovels to date.
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Jodo » Tue May 30, 2017 11:45 am

Glad you enjoyed it man!!!! I'm even looking forward to the next few chapters myself! :lol:
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Lance Quazar » Tue May 30, 2017 12:21 pm

Gonna pop in her with another brief blurb. Longer comments to follow.

But I was DELIGHTED to see another Era of Darkness!

This chapter has tension, intrigue and amazing action! Wonderful visuals, too!

Another terrific installment! Thanks very much for keeping this amazing series going!

more from me to come....... :)
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Jodo » Tue May 30, 2017 10:07 pm

Thanks for the quick comment Lance! I'm looking forward to hearing what else you have to say! :mrgreen:
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Choi » Fri Jun 02, 2017 11:00 am

Another great chapter! You've got a really compelling, exciting story going on, I'm always eager to see the future installments! :D
The newest chapter of my photonovel, Alliance Intelligence, is up! You can check it out here: http://www.yakfaceforums.com/phpBB3/viewtopic.php?f=71&t=8327&p=161239#p161239
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Jodo » Mon Jun 05, 2017 5:02 pm

Thanks man! I expect to release the next chapter around the 18th to 20th depending how assignments go for school. :!:
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby GrandMoffHux14 » Wed Jun 07, 2017 12:29 am

I've been off of here for awhile now and hope to catch up with you guys soon!! I will read this tomorrow Jodo!! I'm sure it's great, hope you are all doing well!
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Lance Quazar » Sat Jun 17, 2017 1:29 pm

Just so you know, I've been reading and re-reading this chapter many times since posted.

And again I'm sorry for the delay in longer replies. And sorry that the whole community seems to be in another lull, which is disappointing, especially since there are so many fantastic series that are still cranking out episodes at a steady clip.

Anyway, I have much more to say about this chapter and will do so soon.

But, for right now, let me just say how much I friggin' LOOOOVE this shot -

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Postby Lance Quazar » Mon Jun 19, 2017 6:44 pm

Jodo!! Another spectacular chapter in this absolutely sterling series! Let's dive right in, shall we?

The Kane's Log is still an excellent and efficient way to bring the viewer back up to speed on what's going on. No offense to other PN writers out there, but I VASTLY prefer it to having the "Star Wars" crawl in literally every chapter, especially since sometimes the chapters take place immediately after the previous chapter. Anyway....

The sense of tension in this chapter is absolutely terrific. The mounting sense of danger is truly palpable. I love Jai's "This is going to be sudden, okay?" So much delicious suspense!

And you maintain that throughout the entire confrontation, Mexican standoff style. It's really terrific, really engaging stuff.

I really like the fact that, despite all that's happened to hijm, Kane would never consider himself a rebel and still has general contempt for the rebellion.

But, of course, there's no better way than to make allies than to have a mutual enemy show up and start blasting everything! Can't wait to see what the future chapters have in store as Kane is pulled (whether he likes it or not) more into the lives of this band of rebels.


The visuals remain outstanding. The gun fight has a real sense or chaos, of movement and kineticism. Really feels urgent and alive, with a real sense of danger. Awesome. I already called out my favorite shot in this chapter above, but just about any shot with Dreya in the frame during the battle is absolutely aces. Loved it!

Between the visuals of the crummy, desolate planet, the rag-tag look to the troops, etc. this really evokes "Rogue One" in all the best ways, giving it a real gritty, on the ground feeling of a very rough and tumble group of rebels who are just barely eeking by. The overall tone of the series is just delightful.

Just a few comments/questions and light critiques -

Wasn't sure if it was the Rebel solider or the stormtrooper who said "Contact right!", but consider the Rebel gets off the first shot, I'm assuming it's him. Might have been scarier, though, if the Imperials got the drop on our gang and managed to get off a kill before our heroes could regroup.

I think the writing in the chapter is excellent, as always, but I think Jai's speechifying went on just a little too long and was a little too didactic and, well, almost too "good." I think you could have scaled it back just a little and gotten the point across.

I do wish Dreya was a little more involved in this chapter. She has great moments, but it feels like Jai Wroth has sort of eclipsed her in importance. There's nothing wrong with that in theory. He's a great character and his put-upon circumstances make him a good and conflicted protagonist.

But given that Dreya has a (still murky) history with kane, it seems like she should have stepped in a little more to help diffuse the situation or something. The implication seemed to be that Kane and Dreya had a friendship and a lot of history. Odd that she wouldn't try to intervene more directly and that Kane wouldn't want to hear from her and not from Wroth to clear things up a bit.

Please, dear god, in the next chapter, let's have Kane out of that uniform. It seems like a natural fit. He's already crossed paths with those imperials and they are sure to remember those distinctive "surplus" uniforms. It feels like the safest way for him and Able squad to proceed would be to ditch the highly recognizable suits and try to blend in.

One more comment about the visuals. While your framing and "directing" is always terrific, I had a suggestion about the opening sequence.

I loved the shots of the different parties slowly converging on each other. But I wonder if you switched it up so it looked like each team was coming from a separate direction if it might help convey that effect.

Both teams seem to be arriving from stage left. But what if it looked like they were coming from opposite directions and moving to converge in a vaguely central location? take a look and let me know if you think this works.

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Does that do anything? I'm not sure....just a thought.

Anyway, another marvelous chapter with fantastic, visceral action, drama and incredible tension!

Thanks for continuing with this spectacular series and I can't wait to see things move forward.

(and, you know, it wouldn't hurt to check in with my old friend Colonel Elliot from time to time.... :D And I'm also wondering if/when Lt. Sumner will make a surprise return, since he's so far been pretty lax on his mission to track down Able Squad!)
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Codaks » Mon Jun 26, 2017 4:28 am

This is one of the most enjoyable photonovels out there.

The rather simple approach on building the shot really works with the whole less is more theme. I personally have always been guys that puts to much attention to detail, but I reallly like your work. As for the writing, the introduction is refreshing and the tension in this chapter, got me to the edge of my seat. Great work

Era of darkness is an enjoyable ride, especially with all the tension in this installment. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Jodo » Sat Jul 01, 2017 3:01 pm

GrandMoffHux14 wrote:I've been off of here for awhile now and hope to catch up with you guys soon!! I will read this tomorrow Jodo!! I'm sure it's great, hope you are all doing well!


Hux, I wondered if you were still creepin' on the forums! :P

Codaks wrote:This is one of the most enjoyable photonovels out there.

The rather simple approach on building the shot really works with the whole less is more theme. I personally have always been guys that puts to much attention to detail, but I reallly like your work. As for the writing, the introduction is refreshing and the tension in this chapter, got me to the edge of my seat. Great work

Era of darkness is an enjoyable ride, especially with all the tension in this installment. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.


Thank you so much man, and welcome to the forums! I hope you enjoy future chapters as well! :)

Lance Quazar wrote:Jodo!! Another spectacular chapter in this absolutely sterling series! Let's dive right in, shall we?


As always Lance, I love reading your feedback (and hearing from you in general)!

I agree the Kane's Log works much better than the scroll as well, especially since I shoot for 60-70 frames per chapter. Longer PN's can get away with the scroll I think, but mine are a bit too brief to have the entire scroll each time!

The battle was a bit of concern for me because I didn't know if it would feel rushed, drawn out, or look like a total mess, LOL. Originally there were a few more shots planned from the Stormtroopers' POV, but it felt a bit more confusing on character placement. The same issue arose in chapter 9 with the conversation between Kane and Dreya, but I didn't take any additional or supplemental shots to "fix" it.

Thank you so much for your positive comments, they really do mean a lot to me!!! Tonal consistency between chapters is always a risk, and I hope to continue in the same vein of internal emotional issues mixed with outward risk of danger.

Constructive criticism is also always appreciated! I think you're 100% right on your feedback. The Rebel was the one who said "contact right", but I should have made that a bit clearer. I wanted it to be like sudden, so I didn't put any dictation in there. :lol:

The mirrored shots of the teams traveling would have worked MUCH better the way you have them as well. Honestly, looking back...I literally have no idea why they weren't photographed that way, LOL. Those were shot waaaaaaayyyyyy back in January (as the **** hit the fan in my life), so I probably wasn't thinking straight. Who know. Either way...I'm stealing your idea. :lol: Now that photobucket has kicked the bucket, I'll be moving whatever the Photonovel Alliance isn't hosting to IMGUR (the One-Shots and this chapter). I will definitely use those mirrored shots you recommended for the introduction, so thank you so much for that!

Dreya and Jai will continue to share the spot light for time being, but I agree Jai took a bit more attention than Dreya deserved. Originally, his character was going to be my way of writing myself into the story, but I think Jai has more charisma than I will ever have. :lol: This version of the speech was an abridged version even, it was two more frames long!!!

Kane and the gang will be switching out costumes soon, and we will see a few more new faces in the process! I'm sooooooo looking forward to Volume 3, you have no idea. I can't believe the series is almost already half way over too. :shock:
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby YAK_Chewie » Sat Jul 15, 2017 12:15 pm

Really hope you're able to get the pics hosted again soon. Was finally going to be able to provide feedback today and forgot about the damn photobucket BS.

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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8

Postby Jodo » Sat Jul 15, 2017 12:28 pm

I was looking through a thread this morning hunting for a picture, and then realized it was gone because of Photobucket's B.S. :x
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Re: Era of Darkness VOL 2: Chapter 8 (Rehosted)

Postby Jodo » Mon Jul 24, 2017 2:28 pm

Chapter 8 is back thanks to Imgur!!!! Looking back through this chapter was fun too. Definitely one of my favorite ones! :mrgreen:

And you'll notice Lance's input played a role in a few frame changes too! Thanks again man! :mrgreen:
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